Wen: 

For the Mariner:
This feels like a very dramatic, dark, beginning of a story or that it could be extended into a story. The imagery is really hitting here and the word choice is immaculate that really brings you into the story/the point you are trying to get across. I think the line breaks are essential the way you have them and to not change them.

In the Black:
With this one I can’t deny, I am a little confused about what is happening here. Or maybe I do have some sense of what is going on. I just feel reading this is making my brain a little foggy trying so hard to understand it. Nonetheless though you did an amazing job with it and painted a great picture of standing in the water. 

The Sailor’s Bastard:
I am starting to see a great pattern in these poems which I am not complaining about. I enjoy reading the different styles, all sort of revolving around the same topic but telling different stories. I think that’s a super cool approach that not many students have done. It is good in the sense that it keeps me, as a reader, engaged in what you may be trying to say in all these poems. 

Uncovering:
Again, with the line of storying, amazing. The metaphor for rocks in tidal pools to discovering something new about yourself was a really strong way to draw the reader in. This gives those who can relate a new way to look at it, a very cool way. Also the idea of the way the “new thing” is hidden and can become hidden again after figuring it out… this might not make sense… I’m trying to figure out how to word my words here, I apologize! 

Eliza: 

Dreams:
I believe this is a poem about escaping the complex life of living as a human to be one with nature—still living but not human. I really enjoy the simplicity and power this poem has. I can appreciate the choice of words and sense of freedom described in this poem. 

Porcupine:
I like the topic of porcupines as they truly aren’t appreciated enough-–forgotten creatures even and I am guilty of that. Reading this poem makes me more intrigued in porcupines. I like the approach taken in this poem, specifically looking at the line, “of all the animals to pick, why, must you be the one.” In other words, “I adore you so much but your defensive pricks are a barrier keeping us apart” which I found to be really cool. 

Persephone Brings Spring:
In this poem, I like how it makes me think, I wasn’t sure what Presephone was so I had to research. After learning she is a Greek Goddess of spring the poem is coming through for me. I think this does a great job at describing said Goddess in such a poetic way. 

Fantastic:
This is honestly one of my favorite poems we’ve read in class. It is so comforting and fun to read. I just very much enjoy the feeling of comfort it brings me with the imagery in the poem. I think you do a great job at painting a picture of the movie, Fantastic Mr. Fox. Though it is short, it leaves an impression.